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Some problems[]

Hello, first time using this function so I apologize for any mistakes I may make.

I have some possible corrections that should be considered. First off the kunai that are thrown, are thrown behind her but not AT her. In this instance Sakura is being used as a diversion and is running directly in front of the kunai, hiding them from the enemies view.

Secondly, Sakura does not jump back. She is forcefully yanked back by Chiyo at the last second.

Thirdly, there is a redundancy in the last few sentences. It is stated that she uses the Cherry Blossom Impact with the assistance of Chiyo but then states that she finishes with a punch. This gives the idea that she punches the enemy after using "Cherry Blossom Impact", especially given that implication is that it's a punching attack when reading the description of the attack. I would suggest removing the punching bit, or editing it for easier readability and understanding. Again sorry for any mistakes. (hopefully I signed the post correctly) Man-o-Vertigo (talk) 16:40, March 14, 2012 (UTC)

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